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Buried Man

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sun goes down, the final set
lost your colors and your sight
follow the shuffling feet
below the surface

cavern drops before you
crawls down through the soil
fire flickers along the walls
like Plato's twisted gods

they pull you further
urging, coaxing, whispering,
draw your name in soot
write only what you see

shadows on the blindfold
cast across the burning rope
frost melts on your tongue
breath comes cold and heavy

"Let us alight upon
your weary brow
(and press the thorns
stuck through our hands)."

the gate is closed
and all that's left
is us and them,
the idol and the pit

they promised no religion
down in the lion's den
but would you know
if they chose to lie again?
Been crazy busy here, but this is something I've cobbled together throughout November.

I chose "spiritual" as the category for this one. Don't ask me why; just felt right.


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This was an engaging read, for me! It seemed to drag me deeper and deeper within its depths, as it continued to whisper lines into my mind. I really felt as if I were being sucked down into this abyss of the lions den, so I thought that was incredible!

I quite liked the third stanza. That last line just seemed to send a spark through me, and I instantly became more attentive. I just... that line! "Write only what you see..." it was just brilliant. Perhaps I feel such a connection to this, because as a child, I had an art teacher who constantly told us students to "Draw only what you see." I always took this to mean we were only supposed to draw what was true. So seeing this line... it seems as if you are finding the truth and writing it. Though that probably wasn't your intention. I really enjoyed it, though!

However, That fifth stanza, I think, steals my entire heart. There is so much emotion here... you write with such unrestrained passion! The fact you can push so much within these words... it's just beautiful! I think art should bring about one's passion, and I'm so delighted to see you put so much of that love into your words.
Lovely job! :rose: